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Ohio Haiku

Rain. Snow melts today;
I find a wet newspaper.
Date? Jan 12, 05


Rain. Snow melts today;
I find a wet newspaper.
Date? 1/12/05

Posted by Maman on February 16, 2005 9:20 AM |

Comments

Hmm...I think it actually flowed a bit better as 1/12/05 ... even if I didn't notice the date!

Posted by: Mara | February 17, 2005 2:36 AM

Well, I can change it back. Any one else with an opinion? I'm taking votes here.

Posted by: Nannie | February 17, 2005 9:38 AM

I actually didn't notice the difference until I read the responses.

Posted by: Rae | February 22, 2005 7:48 PM

Okay, so the concesus is that I should leave poetry to Daddy? I asked him about it and he said, "I never did get Haiku."

Posted by: Nannie | February 24, 2005 3:03 PM

I'm not sure how you got the conclusion that the consesus is that the poem wasn't any good. THis haiku clearly follows the rule of including somethign to indicate the season, it also conveys emotion. I'm just saying either way you write the date works.

Posted by: Rae | February 25, 2005 12:05 AM

Okay, so I'm paranoid -- especially about poetry. I'm sorry for being whiny and pathetic. I have no confidence about poetry and much bad experience with it. Maybe I'll write a haiku about that.

Posted by: Nannie | February 25, 2005 10:32 AM

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